Sunday, 21 February 2016

Popcorn writing

Popcorn Writing

It was a nice sunny day, we were doing something special, today we were making popcorn. We all gathered round the mighty machine. Ms Reynolds turned on the machine at first nothing happened then it rumbled into life. It was almost like it had awoken up from a 100 year sleep. Ms Reynolds poured the kettles into the machine “Pop.. Pop” it started make popping noises and popcorn started to overflow, the amazing smell of butter popcorn wafted up my nose. Then the unspeakable happened a ‘Popcorn Tsunami’ it was flying everywhere and ms Reynolds was grabbing  bowls frantically to fill with popcorn.

5 comments:

  1. "It was almost like it had woken up from a 100 year sleep". My favourite sentence! I can just picture it... I'm glad you managed to survive the "popcorn tsunami"! Miss D :)

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  2. Great wording Ollie I had a big picture in my head

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  3. Ollie - I enjoyed how you started your writing with a calm feeling to it, then gradually build up the tension of the experience of making popcorn, ending with the excitement of our "popcorn tsunami", popcorn "flying everywhere" and "grabbing bowls frantically". Well done! Kiri

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  4. Great Ollie I liked it a lot keep the good work up.

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  5. I loved it it made a great picture in my mined

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